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muthurajan
muthurajan Jan 6
The Ocean Smiles at Me - Shivani Pujari - October 2018

My feet rest in crystal blue waves

My hands dig into the softestsand you could imagine

The sun heats my body, wrapping me in a blanket of warmth


An endless expanse of beautiful sapphire ocean s t r e t c h e s to the ends of the Earth

Seagulls screech like sirens, playing above the white crests of waves

Above them

the sky floats

white wisps of cotton drift...


Crabs scuttle, leaving indents in the

perfectly

placed

sand

Seashells are scattered around the beach, creating constellations

WHOoOooSH!the wind whispers through the silence



Posted : Muthurajan M

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Babu
Babu Jan 6
Nice one..


muthurajan
muthurajan Jan 6
Thanks. This poem is by my grand daughter.
scsood
scsood Jan 6
Lovely poem
muthurajan
muthurajan Jan 7
Thanks Mr. Sood
Quote from scsood Lovely poem


Quote from scsood Lovely poem


muthurajan
muthurajan Jan 7

Quote from VAS

My dear Pearlking,

 I enjoyed your GD'S wonderful poem that took me to the sea shore i like a lot.

Thanks VAS. Though she is just 12 but has authored a lot of poems and short stories.
The Forum post is edited by muthurajan Jan 8
hari1941
hari1941 Jan 8
Beautiful and so imaginative. I am sure she was at some beach on a sunny day. 
muthurajan
muthurajan Jan 8
Thanks Hari! She enjoys playing in shore. She spent hours in Thiruchendur beach in Tamilnadu.
Sabarmathy
Sabarmathy Jan 9
Very nice poem by your granddaughter Muthurajan.
muthurajan
muthurajan Jan 9
Thanks, Sabarmathy for the encouraging words!
Babu
Babu Jan 10
Your granddaughter needs all encouragement

and also be advised of  some improvement.

shobham
shobham Jan 10
Pat the budding poetess on the back for me please. 

Lovely poem. 

muthurajan
muthurajan Jan 11

Quote from Babu Your granddaughter needs all encouragement

and also be advised of  some improvement.


Your suggestion for improvement is welcome!


muthurajan
muthurajan Jan 11

Quote from shobham Pat the budding poetess on the back for me please. 

Lovely poem. 


Sure! She just loves pat on her back!
Babu
Babu Jan 11
Muthurajan... Ask your granddaughter to choose a topic first.

Start writing whatever comes to mind..

For example Sun and Moon.

Write simple sentences on Sun and Moon.

Write whatever she may like/feel.

Then score out what is not necessary/repeated.

This way she can polish her writing skill.

I think I have given a hint.

More important this should in Poetic form.